Persuasive Category 2010 Honorable Mention

Treasure Island the Golden Scene
By Bryan Kau, grade 6
Waolani Judd Nazarene School

Have you ever been made to do something against your will? Well, Mo had to, in this scene.
Mo, Meggie, and Elinor were dragged to the village church after enduring a painfully long night in
their “cage.”Mo was forced to read out of Treasure Island and bring out gold at Capricorn's request.
Mo becomes worth more to Capricorn, passes his test, and becomes a vital person to Capricorn all by successfully bringimg out gold from Treasure Island.

First, Mo skillfully brought out gold from Treasure Island, he becomes more valuable to
Capricorn. Signs that show Mo heightens in worth is Capricorn sent him tea after he was done reading. That shows that Capricorn does not want Mo to lose his voice. Capricorn also locks Mo up, which means he does not him to run away. Lastly no matter what Mo does to Capricorn's men they won't do anything back. That shows me that Mo is to important to get hurt.

Next, proving to Capricorn that can read things out of books, Mo passes Capricorn's test.
Capricorn says, “Not bad for a start Silvertongue.” This reveals that Capricorn is pleased with the
results Mo showed him. Capricorn also says, “This was just a test,” which proves that Capricorn just
wanted to test his skills. Finally gold falls from the sky. This means that Mo successfully brings gold
out of Treasure Island.

In addition, Capricorn needs Mo now. We know this because Capricorn says he wants Mo to
bring a friend from the book and Capricorn needs Mo to bring out his friend. Capricorn also states, “I never let your substitute try his skill with my friend.” Mo is the only one who is able to bring his friend here. It is the only reason why Capricorn keeps Mo, Elinor, and Meggie because he wants Mo to read things out of books. This is why I think this scene is important.

For all the reasons stated above, this is why I think this scene is important. It is important
because it heightens the worth Mo is to Capricorn, Mo aces his test, and Capricorn needs him. All
because of this one scene. Without this scene we would have never known why Capricorn wanted Mo.

The Process

1. The students were asked to select a scene from Inkheart. They then filled out a planning sheet that asked them to briefly summarize their scene; list some descriptive quotes they enjoyed; any author's craft they noticed; whose point of view was the scene written from; and some of the events that occurred in their scene.

2. The students filled out a web that they normally use to plan papers they write.

3. The teacher modeled writing a persuasive paper as is normally done when students write their drafts. The model paper was based on a chapter none of the students used.

4. The students wrote their drafts, then did a "Self-Edit" sheet with a checklist similar to what they normally use for their papers which has them check organization, ideas/content, conventions, fluency, voice and word choice. They exchanged papers and two other students read their paper, checked it against the "Partner-Edit" checklist and made comments.

5. Students revised and typed their papers.

6. The teacher reviewed their papers, checking spelling, grammar, and sense.

7. Students revised their papers, reprinted and proofed them and completed their final paper. Students helped proof each others' papers.